Third pitch powerpoint

Using the feedback I was given on my second pitch, I decided it would be useful to have a final attempt at creating a pitch even though it will not be formally presented. This allows me to know in more depth what goes into a professional pitch. 

I feel that this pitch is a lot more successful than the previous two due to the level of detail and volume of information which is being presented. It gives a more holistic view of my story idea than the previous two which means that it creates a deeper understanding of what I am attempting to create. The level of detail also gives a deeper insight into my story idea which is useful not only for who I am presenting to, but for myself in giving me a guide to which direction I am heading. The extra information provided on the two characters such as casting and costume I believe to be very useful as it means that the pitch has a lot more depth in terms of the actual content of the trailer. It also shows that I have thought in a lot more depth about what is going to be included in my trailer and the finer details as opposed to the general overview which I presented in my previous two pitches. The music also shows the deeper level of detail which is achieved in the pitch compared to the previous two as it not only talks about what music will be used, but also the effect that this music will have on the audience and how it will contribute to the story and the overall effect of the trailer. This is also shown in the information on the shot ideas as it shows that I have a strong idea of just how I am going to achieve the end result that I am aiming for, this makes the pitch overall more convincing and professional compared to the previous two pitches. The specifics of the location also add to the credibility of the presentation as it builds up the image of exactly how the story is going to be conveyed onto film as who I am presenting to would now be able to create an image of what is going on in their head.

There are, however, still improvements that I could make, such as more detailed information on the exact shots I am planning on using to convey my story and what effect I believe that they will create. This would make my pitch even more believable as it would show that I have a clear, defined idea of how I am going to convert my idea onto film in the most believable and professional way possible. I could have also included character profiles in order to familiarise those I am pitching to with my characters to allow them a better understanding of the story.